Tuesday, November 13, 2007

Theodore and Brooke Meet the Shark

Also titled: Theodore's Really Bad Day

Written and illustrated by Lillian

Here's the latest gem from my future novelist. She's got the brevity of Steinbeck, the perkiness of Hemingway and the plot lines of Stephen King. I smell National Book Award . . .

Theodore and Brooke lived in a little house by a small pond.  One day they decided to go on a walk in the woods.  They walked and they walked and they walked.  They came to the small pond.Theodore and Brooke Meet the SharkBrooke didn't want Theodore to go into the pond but he did. When Theodore went into the pond there was quicksand on the bottom and it sucked him and sucked him down and down into the quicksand.

"Help!" he said.  

He pulled out of the quicksand.

But there were leeches in the water and they wrapped themselves all around Theodore and pulled him back into the quicksand. The leeches wrapped themselves tighter and tighter around Theodore's eggs and larms.  I mean Theodore's legs and arms [sic].Theodore and Brooke Meet the Shark

He crawled out of the water and got the leeches off of him.  Brooke and Theodore went back to the house.  

But later they decided to go to the pond again.  When they got to the pond there was a small shark in the water.  He wanted to play with them but Brooke told Theodore not to go back into the pond.  Theodore said he wanted to play with the shark so he went back in the water.  

The shark ate him up.Theodore and Brooke Meet the SharkThe end.

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24 comments:

Erica Douglas said...

Excellent story, very gripping. I particularly liked the vicious ending!

Julie Pippert said...

That's fantastic...and great to read and see. Also, so nice to know my child is not the only one good at gory climaxes LOL.

Julie
Using My Words

Chris said...

Oh my, a surprising ending! That girl has potential.

Great story, Lillian!

Summer said...

Ok, this made me laugh out loud. My mom saved two of the stories I wrote as a kid and I must say they never ended like that.

Melissa Garrett said...

It just goes to show that men never listen to the good advice of a woman . . . (and even a small girl understands that)

Excellent story, indeed!!

Babystepper said...

But, really, Theo had it coming, because the man had no common sense at all. Brooke went on to lead a life of peace and contentment.

randi---i have to say said...

I can definitely see the Stephen King comparison here! ;)

Very cute!

Janet said...

Keep that girl writing!!!! I can't wait for Mary Margaret and William to start doing that sort of thing. So far nearly every picture they've drawn is plastered all over our walls. We'll have to get a filing cabinet each when they start writing stories.

April said...

Hilarious story. I love love love the illustrations!

Rani said...

love this.

way to encourage writing and literacy in your own children.

she must have a pretty good coach!

My Ice Cream Diary said...

Is Lillian the same sweety who wrote the Wishbone Book report with all the blood? What a riot!

G's Cottage said...

Wow, "On Walden Pond" meets "African Queen". I think shes ready for her own NaNo young writer's account.

jubilee said...

My son's artwork and literary attempts have similar themes. Glad to know he's not the only one!

Cocoa said...

Great story! After reading your last post though I'm left wondering if she purposefully made the 'dumb' character a boy. ;D

Heffalump said...

A future pessimist if I ever saw one!

Mary@notbefore7 said...

OK, LOVED that! I also love how you compare her writing style to such well known authors. I can certainly see that Stephen King edge there...

Keep her writing for sure.

SabineM said...

That is amazing! Love the drawings!
Made me laugh! she does have potential!

THE BLUEST BUTTERFLY said...

The picture at the end is what does it for me. :-)

THE BLUEST BUTTERFLY said...

Did you show Lillian all the nice things that people are saying about her on your blog???

JAM said...

That's really good. Plus she can even illustrate her own stuff.

Y'all may get to retire early and live off your daughter's income. Well, you can dream anyway.

allrileyedup said...

Any book involving a shark eating someone up is guaranteed to be sold and made into a movie.

edj said...

I LOVE that! What an awesome storyteller she is!

wayabetty said...

I smell "New York bestseller" all the way here!

luckyzmom said...

Hill-air-ee-us!