Written and illustrated by Lillian
Here's the latest gem from my future novelist. She's got the brevity of Steinbeck, the perkiness of Hemingway and the plot lines of Stephen King. I smell National Book Award . . .
Theodore and Brooke lived in a little house by a small pond. One day they decided to go on a walk in the woods. They walked and they walked and they walked. They came to the small pond.
Brooke didn't want Theodore to go into the pond but he did. When Theodore went into the pond there was quicksand on the bottom and it sucked him and sucked him down and down into the quicksand."Help!" he said.
He pulled out of the quicksand.
But there were leeches in the water and they wrapped themselves all around Theodore and pulled him back into the quicksand. The leeches wrapped themselves tighter and tighter around Theodore's eggs and larms. I mean Theodore's legs and arms [sic].
He crawled out of the water and got the leeches off of him. Brooke and Theodore went back to the house.
But later they decided to go to the pond again. When they got to the pond there was a small shark in the water. He wanted to play with them but Brooke told Theodore not to go back into the pond. Theodore said he wanted to play with the shark so he went back in the water.
The shark ate him up.
The end.***
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24 comments:
Excellent story, very gripping. I particularly liked the vicious ending!
That's fantastic...and great to read and see. Also, so nice to know my child is not the only one good at gory climaxes LOL.
Julie
Using My Words
Oh my, a surprising ending! That girl has potential.
Great story, Lillian!
Ok, this made me laugh out loud. My mom saved two of the stories I wrote as a kid and I must say they never ended like that.
It just goes to show that men never listen to the good advice of a woman . . . (and even a small girl understands that)
Excellent story, indeed!!
But, really, Theo had it coming, because the man had no common sense at all. Brooke went on to lead a life of peace and contentment.
I can definitely see the Stephen King comparison here! ;)
Very cute!
Keep that girl writing!!!! I can't wait for Mary Margaret and William to start doing that sort of thing. So far nearly every picture they've drawn is plastered all over our walls. We'll have to get a filing cabinet each when they start writing stories.
Hilarious story. I love love love the illustrations!
love this.
way to encourage writing and literacy in your own children.
she must have a pretty good coach!
Is Lillian the same sweety who wrote the Wishbone Book report with all the blood? What a riot!
Wow, "On Walden Pond" meets "African Queen". I think shes ready for her own NaNo young writer's account.
My son's artwork and literary attempts have similar themes. Glad to know he's not the only one!
Great story! After reading your last post though I'm left wondering if she purposefully made the 'dumb' character a boy. ;D
A future pessimist if I ever saw one!
OK, LOVED that! I also love how you compare her writing style to such well known authors. I can certainly see that Stephen King edge there...
Keep her writing for sure.
That is amazing! Love the drawings!
Made me laugh! she does have potential!
The picture at the end is what does it for me. :-)
Did you show Lillian all the nice things that people are saying about her on your blog???
That's really good. Plus she can even illustrate her own stuff.
Y'all may get to retire early and live off your daughter's income. Well, you can dream anyway.
Any book involving a shark eating someone up is guaranteed to be sold and made into a movie.
I LOVE that! What an awesome storyteller she is!
I smell "New York bestseller" all the way here!
Hill-air-ee-us!
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